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18 September 2010 @ 05:17 pm
Saturday 01  
Hello, and welcome to Saturday's post: post an excerpt of a fic you are working on! If you want to get some feedback by previewing it for people, or if you want to tease us with how awesome it is, please post it in the comments! Get some help, get some fans, ask if anyone wants to beta; do whatever.

Have fun! ♥
 
 
 
the infraggable crunkblualbino on September 19th, 2010 04:31 am (UTC)
This is part of a Mal/Cobb/Arthur fic that Incepted my brain and is now being very piece-y and irritating to write :/

They’ve both forgotten how to eat.

“I just. Haven’t done it in so long,” Mal says, picking apart the sandwich Arthur made her. Flecks of peanut butter and grape jelly, staples in any parent’s household, stick to her fingers and she warily licks them. White tufts of bread litter her plate.

Dom hasn’t said one word since Arthur’s been home. He’s barely looked away from Mal long enough to acknowledge Arthur, food, pictures of his children.

Arthur’s never been more glad for Phillipa and James to be away. Seeing Dom and Mal in this state would scare the ever-loving hell out of them, like it’s scaring Arthur.

Mal takes the saltshaker in her hand, turns it in her palm. Dom takes her other hand in both of his, watching.

“We had one just like this in our home.”

“This is your home,” Arthur says.

“This is a fake,” Mal says. It slips from her fingers and shatters on the table, a mushroom cloud of white powder. Arthur swears, flinching away.

Dom brings Mal’s hand to his mouth; kisses her knuckles.

Yeah, not much, but I like what I have so far.
Yo: Inceptiondreamlittleyo on September 19th, 2010 04:41 am (UTC)
Ooooh, I LIKE this! I love seeing them from Arthur's perspective like this - and how terrified he is, and all the little details that are so off and perfect. Not remembering how to EAT, dude. That never would've occurred to me, but it makes so much sense.

I can completely sympathize with the writing-in-uncooperative-pieces. I get so frustrated with stories that come to me that way now, because hammering out all the bits in between feels like such an unpredictable process.

For what it's worth, I hope it cooperates, because I would love to read the rest of this.

Edited at 2010-09-19 04:41 am (UTC)
the infraggable crunkblualbino on September 19th, 2010 04:47 am (UTC)
:D!

The frustration is that I know what I want to happen, but it's all just a little fucked up in a way that's hard to write. I know I'll like the result, but for right now it's annoying.

Thank you <3
Jenstrokeof_genie on September 19th, 2010 04:57 am (UTC)
Oh, this is going to be so sad, isn't it?

I love Cobb's preoccupation with Mal in this; it's very like how it seemed in the movie, like they rotate around each other, or just him around her after limbo. Mal's already haunted in it and I like that, and Arthur's so perfectly out of his element. It seems kind of like he's an outsider to them, now.
the infraggable crunkblualbino on September 19th, 2010 05:04 am (UTC)
Probably /o\

I'm glad you got that! I was really trying to show Arthur being the odd man out while Mal and Cobb are off in their own little world. My idea was that they all have a history together, and now Arthur's on his own.
Jenstrokeof_genie on September 19th, 2010 05:21 am (UTC)
I definitely got that Arthur was on his own suddenly, and unsure of how to react to it. Like, they were equals in the relationship before this, and now it's them, and him. :(
the infraggable crunkblualbino on September 19th, 2010 05:29 am (UTC)
:D That's great! But now it appears I've made you sad *hugs*
Jenstrokeof_genie on September 19th, 2010 06:02 am (UTC)
Hah, *hugs* I'm overly invested in character's happiness. I'm very excited about your fic, because it's such a cool premise. Am I allowed to ask if it will be compliant with movie canon?
the infraggable crunkblualbino on September 19th, 2010 06:09 am (UTC)
It'll be more or less compliant. I don't think it'll get to the Fischer job, but it'll be compliant with everything we know before that. (Or, if you're asking a different question, yeah, Mal's still going to die ;___;)
Jenstrokeof_genie on September 19th, 2010 05:24 pm (UTC)
I guessed that, and awww. ;_; But that still sounds awesome. I'm really looking forward to it. And hopefully to Cobb finding his way back to Arthur?

Edited at 2010-09-19 05:54 pm (UTC)
the infraggable crunkblualbino on September 19th, 2010 09:50 pm (UTC)
Of course he will, otherwise it would be way too sad ;__;
Jenstrokeof_genie on September 20th, 2010 02:16 am (UTC)
aahahah I'm so relieved!
saxon_dogs on September 19th, 2010 07:04 am (UTC)
I love the pacing of this bit-- it's so tense and nerve wracking. Poor Arthur, having to deal with that! I hope you wrestle the rest of this into compliance; would love to read more!
the infraggable crunkblualbino on September 19th, 2010 07:09 am (UTC)
<3 Thanks, I'll try!